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‘Macbeth’ Grade 9 Example Response

Grade 9 – full mark – ‘Macbeth’ response

Starting with this extract (from act 1 scene 7), how does Shakespeare present the relationship between Macbeth and Lady Macbeth?

In Shakespeare’s eponymous tragedy ‘Macbeth’, Macbeth and Lady Macbeth’s relationship is a complex portrait of love, illustrating layers of utter devotion alongside overwhelming resentment. Though the couple begins the play unnaturally strong within their marriage, this seems to act as an early warning of their imminent and inevitable fall from grace, ending the play in an almost entirely different relationship than the one they began the play with.

In the exposition of the play, Macbeth and Lady Macbeth initially appear immensely strong within their marriage, with Macbeth describing his wife as ‘my dearest partner of greatness’ in act 1 scene 5. The emotive superlative adjective ‘dearest’ is a term of endearment, and acts as a clear depiction of how valued Lady Macbeth is by her husband. Secondly, the noun ‘partner’ creates a sense of sincere equality which, as equality within marriage would have been unusual in the Jacobean era, illustrates to a contemporary audience the positive aspects of their relationship. Furthermore the lexical choice ‘greatness’ may connote ambition, and as they are ‘partner(s)’, Shakespeare suggests that Macbeth and Lady Macbeth are equal in their desire for power and control, further confirming their compatibility but potentially hinting that said compatibility will serve as the couple’s hamartia.

However, the strength of Macbeth and Lady Macbeth’s relationship falls into a rapid downward spiral in the subsequent scenes, as a struggle for power within the marriage ensues. This is evidenced when Macbeth, in act 1 scene 7, uses the declarative statement ‘we will proceed no further in this business’. Here, Macbeth seems to exude masculinity, embracing his gender role and dictating both his and his wife’s decisions. The negation ‘no’ clearly indicates his alleged definitive attitude. However, Lady Macbeth refuses to accept her husband’s rule, stating ‘when you durst do it, then you were a man’. She attempts to emasculate him to see their plan through. The verb ‘durst’ illustrates the risk taking behaviour that Lady Macbeth is encouraging; implying an element of toxicity within their relationship, and her harsh speech makes the cracks in their relationship further visible to the audience. It is also probable that a contemporary audience would be made severely uncomfortable in the presence of Lady Macbeth’s unapologetic display of power, and it is possible that Shakespeare attempts to paint Lady Macbeth as the villain of the play, playing upon the audience’s pre-determined fears of feminine power. Though Lady Macbeth appears to be acting entirely out of self-interest, another reader may argue that she influences her husband so heavily to commit the heinous act of regicide, as she believes that he crown may as a substitute for the child or children that Shakespeare suggests she and Macbeth have lost previously, and in turn better Macbeth’s life and bring him to the same happiness that came with the child, except in another form.

As the play progresses, Shakespeare creates more and more distance between the characters, portraying the breakdown of their relationship as gradual within the play but rapid in the overall sense of time on stage. For example, Lady Macbeth requests a servant ‘say to the king’ Lady Macbeth ‘would attend his leisure/ for a few words’. Here she is reduced to the status of someone far lesser than the king, having to request to speak to her own husband. It could be interpreted that, now as king, Macbeth holds himself above all else, even his wife, perhaps due to the belief of the divine right of kings. The use of the title rather than his name plainly indicated the lack of closeness Lady Macbeth now feels with Macbeth and intensely emotionally separates them. This same idea is referenced as Shakespeare develops the characters to almost juxtapose each other in their experiences after the murder of Duncan. For example, Macbeth seems to be trapped in a permanent day, after ‘Macbeth does murder sleep’ and his guilt and paranoia render him unable to rest. In contrast, Lady Macbeth takes on an oppositional path, suffering sleepwalking and unable to wake from her nightmare; repeating the phrase ‘to bed. To bed’ as if trapped in a never-ending night. This illustrates to the audience the extreme transformation Macbeth and Lady Macbeth’s relationship undergoes, and how differently they end up experiencing the aftermath of regicide.

In conclusion, Macbeth and Lady Macbeth begin the play almost too comfortable within their marriage, which seems to invite the presence of chaos and tragedy into their relationship. Their moral compositions are opposing one another, which leads to the distancing and total breakdown of their once successful marriage and thus serves as a warning to the audience about the effects of murder, and what the deadly sin of greed can do to a person and a marriage.

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It is also probable that a contemporary audience would be made severely uncomfortable in the presence of Lady Macbeth’s unapologetic display of power, and it is possible that Shakespeare attempts to paint Lady Macbeth as the villain of the play, playing upon the audience’s pre-determined fears of feminine power.

Also ref to ‘divine right of kings’

Thank you! This is a brilliant response. Just what I needed. Could you also please include the extract in the question.

We will proceed no further in this business. He hath honored me of late, and I have bought Golden opinions from all sorts of people, Which would be worn now in their newest gloss, Not cast aside so soon.

—> until end of scene

She did (Act 1 Scene 7)

Another great resource for grade 9 Macbeth analysis https://youtu.be/bGzLDRX71bs

In order to get a grade 9 for a piece like this would you need to include a wide range of vocabulary or could you write the same thing ‘dumbed down’ and get a 9.

If the ideas were as strong then yes, but your writing must AT LEAST be ‘clear’ for a grade 6 or above.

This is really great, I’m in Year 10 doing my Mock on Thursday, a great point that i have found (because I also take history) Is the depiction of women throughout the play, during the Elizabethan era, (before the Jacobean era) many people had a changed view of women as Queen Elizabeth was such a powerful woman, glimpses of this have been shown in Jacobean plays, in this case Macbeth, Lady Macbeth is depicted as powerful although she had to be killed of to please King James (as he was a misogynist) women are also depicted as evil in the play, such as the three witches, I also found that the Witches are in three which could be a mockery to the Holy Trinity.

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Grade 9 essay on fate in Macbeth

With useful literary criticism.

With the GCSE Shakespeare exam on Monday, I’m sharing a couple of essays on my favourite play, Macbeth.

Here’s an essay on the role of fate drawing on Emma Smith’s This is Shakespeare.

Fate in Macbeth

Shakespeare’s Macbeth is a character whose fate appears to be overdetermined with a convergence of influences leading to his downfall. As Smith argues in ‘This is Shakespeare’, the problem with the question of who is responsible for what happens in Macbeth is that there are too many characters and forces affecting Macbeth, which leaves us feeling the end he meets is inevitable. 

Smith suggests Burton’s ‘Anatomy of Melancholy’ as a potential source of inspiration for Shakespeare writing Macbeth. Burton attempts to identify the sources of melancholy and argues that there may be a convergence of factors contributing and exacerbating an individual’s melancholy. The determining factors can be reduced to three broad categories: the self, others and the supernatural or spiritual. Smith argues similarly that Macbeth’s fate is influenced by the supernatural (the witches), others (Lady Macbeth) and himself and his own hamartia. 

We can begin with the ‘Weird Sisters’, those 3 who ‘look not like the inhabitants o’ the earth.’ They appear on the field of battle in the aftermath of conflict and seem to be clairvoyant. Macbeth is told he will be ‘Thane of Cawdor’ and not long later he holds that title. From the viewpoint of Macbeth, there seems to be little doubt of the witches supernatural powers. But whether or not the weird sisters are able to predict the future, and perhaps an allusion to the 3 fates from Greek mythology, there is little doubt that they are not of this world, but belong to the realm of the supernatural. Witches were a popular theatre trope at the time and would have appealed to superstitious Jacobeans. This is a time of witch hunts where people believe devils or witches are able to transfigure themselves and set about manipulating and corrupting good Christian souls for Lucifer. Using this historical lens, it makes sense that Macbeth is naturally distrusting of the ‘weird sisters’ who appear ‘withered’ and ‘wild’ women, conforming to the stereotype. Witches were considered experts in manipulation and capable of persuading, so a Jacobean audience might likely expect Macbeth to be persuaded and corrupted by these dark forces. Another way the witches successfully persuade Macbeth is by appealing to his hamartia: ambition. The tricolonic echoe of ‘All hail, Macbeth!’ from each of the weird sisters inspires Macbeth to visualise each ascendency in rank: Cawdor, Glamis and finally king of Scotland, which triggers his pursuit.

However, Shakespeare doesn’t simply present Macbeth as a character spellbound by the witches, but rather as someone who chooses to ignore his better judgement. In his aside, Macbeth reflects on the ‘supernatural soliciting’ saying paradoxically that it ‘cannot be good, cannot be ill’, suggesting that it would be better to put this encounter out of his mind altogether. Although he won’t because his own ambition and darker desires spur him forward. Macbeth’s own interpretation of the ‘weird sisters’ words are sinister, saying that this ‘horrid image doth unfix my hair/ and make my seated heart knock at my ribs.’ Although not said explicitly, this extreme emotional response suggests that Macbeth imagines himself murdering Duncan and those who precede him in rank to sit on the throne. Notably, the witches give Macbeth no instruction, but Macbeth influenced by his own darker desires wilfully interprets their words in this way.

In the succeeding scene Macbeth is given the throne to Cawdor and this arguably confirms for Macbeth the accuracy of the witches prophecies. Ironically moments before Macbeth arrives in the scene, Duncan asks if the traitorous Cawdor has been executed. He laments ‘there’s no art/ to find the mind’s construction in the face’, telling us appearances can be deceiving. Just before this scene on the heath, Shakespeare hints at Macbeth’s deceptive nature where Macbeth delivers a series of asides speaking his mind away from Banquo, before saying that they should think upon what has happened and then ‘let us speak our hearts freely to each other.’ Although, you could argue that this would be the wisest course of action as the witches’ prophecies are treasonous and speaking plainly comes with great risk, so considering this it is only sensible, that what has happened is ‘weighed’, perhaps meaning given proper reflection. Even still at the very least Macbeth’s choice of language presents him as a calculating figure, and if not dishonest, deceptive and guarded. Shakespeare wants to hint that Macbeth is driven by an overwhelming ambition to claim the throne, which he attempts to conceal and repress. Focussing on these details it becomes apparent that Shakespeare is foreshadowing Macbeth's later treachery, and the audience comes to expect the dark comic irony of one traitor being replaced with another, and one who does an even better job to conceal his intentions and win the trust of Duncan. 

Not long after Macbeth is crowned Thane of Cawdor does he invite Duncan to dine and he and Lady Macbeth scheme to murder and usurp Duncan. Although it is Macbeth that plants the idea in Lady Macbeth, it is his wife who seems to successfully persuade and embolden Macbeth to do the ‘horrid deed.’ He falters in his conviction and perhaps his conscience stops him. ‘I have no spur to prick the sides of my intent’ Macbeth says. This metaphor suggests that he has lost the drive and momentum and it is Lady Macbeth who is the ‘spur’ to ‘prick’ him into action. Lady Macbeth does this by attacking his masculinity, appealing to his ambition and even offering to lend a hand. When his wife calls him a coward, Macbeth retorts ‘I dare do all that may become a man; who dares more is none’. Macbeth’s retort implies that there is no honour in the ‘deed’. Yet eventually he succumbs to his wife’s taunts and cajoling.

However from thereon Lady Macbeth moves into the background and it is Macbeth who does all the scheming and plots the subsequent murderers of his own initiative, being not merely reactive but proactive in his pursuit to secure the throne, and also to thwart the prophecy of Banquo’s heirs inheriting the throne. That is why he attempts to assassinate both Banquo and his son Fleance together. At this point his repressed desire has been unleashed and he loses control. As Macbeth puts it, ‘I am in blood / Stepped in so far, that, should I wade no more, / Returning were as tedious as go o'er.' In this metaphor Macbeth suggests that he has reached a point of no return, but more significantly he uses the word ‘tedious’ suggesting a disinterest to return to righteousness. He has become numb to murder. 

In conclusion, it’s the convergence of factors, the witches planting the seeds of ambition in Macbeth, Lady Macbeth spurring Macbeth to murder Duncan and Macbeth’s own lack of control and unchained desires which converge to secure his downfall. Shakespeare sets out to over-determine Macbeth’s fate and there’s no clear single factor but a multiplicity of contributing factors which seem to lead Macbeth to ‘dusty death.’ In his tomorrow and tomorrow soliloquy, Macbeth captures this feeling that his tragic fate was always inevitable; he projects his own feelings: he is the ‘poor player’ who ‘struts and frets his hour on the stage’, finding brief spotlight on the stage as king before his candle is snuffed out.

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Macbeth: Essay Plan Examples

A* and Level 9 essays are always properly planned before they are written. But how should you plan a Macbeth Essay?

Here is a list of practise plans and notes that students have completed for a range of essays on Macbeth. Some are focused on ideas, and others on structuring. To get the best out of your plans, you should try to keep a balance between both of these.

Always plan a thesis before writing — this is your main argument, the main answer to the question that comes in the intro of your essay. The rest of the essay should then explore and argue on this thesis.

This page is suitable for students aged 14–18 (GCSE — A-Level), particularly those studying the following exam boards: CIE / Cambridge, AQA, OCR, WJEC / Eduqas, CCEA, Edexcel.

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PRACTICE ESSAY 1:

Explore how Shakespeare discusses the theme of deception in Macbeth.

Trickery begets trickery — Macbeth deceives Duncan at the start, Banquo shortly after, he himself is deceived by the Witches > negative comment on deception.

Feudal system / divine right of kings vs New Politics / Machiavelli.

Deception creates temporary power, but the order of the world will be restored.

God ignores the castle — sinful behavior causes God to turn away.

Thesis: deception is evil and creates more evil and chaos, both for the individuals who deceive and the kingdom as a whole. For the human characters, it leads down a path to insanity, Shakespeare is drawing a parallel between deception and evil to show that it is ungodly and sinful.

P1 — Intro — Shakespeare discusses the theme of deception in Macbeth by exploring Macbeth’s insanity, showing the Macbeths covering their tracks and the temporary success with long term failure that deception brings.

P2 — Macbeth’s insanity — “oh full of scorpions is my mind”, “could not I pronounce Amen” “Is this a dagger I see before me”.

P3 — Showing the Macbeths covering their tracks — creates a climate of panic and paranoia — “I’ll gild the faces of the grooms withal”.

P4 — demonstrates the religious messages of Macbeth — don’t commit sinful behavior.

P5 — demonstrates Shakespeare’s political beliefs — his faith in the Feudal system / his mistrust of New Politics.

PRACTISE ESSAY 2:

How does Shakespeare make this scene particularly terrifying?

500–600 Words essay.

5 Paragraphs:

• Intro — 50 words — Go over points quickly > thesis at the end
• Paragraph 1 (PEAL) — 165 words
• Paragraph 2 (PEAL) — 165 words
• Paragraph 3 (PEAL) — 165 words
• Conclusion — Recap strongest points quickly > Link back to the thesis

Paragraph plans

• Shakespeare makes this scene particularly terrifying by… (religion)
• Furthermore, the scene is particularly terrifying due to … (fear)
• Another way that Shakespeare has made this scene particularly terrifying is… (supernatural)

PARAGRAPH STRUCTURE:

Point — 1 Sentence

Evidence — Quotation (no longer than 7 words).

Analysis — Identify techniques, language features, vocabulary, and dramatic devices ‘how / why’ something works in a certain way.

Evaluation — assessing the importance/significance of something.

Link — Link back to text and thesis.

Thesis: The significant turning point for Macbeth in the play as he realizes that he is unable to say amen and might be haunted due to his deed. Macbeth is a dynamic character, a tragic hero who undergoes a tragic fall, and this moment demonstrates the point at which his mind begins to disintegrate and he is abandoned by God, which would be very terrifying for a Shakespearean audience.

Top Level Mark Scheme:

• Answers in this band have all the qualities of Band 2 work, with further  insight, sensitivity, individuality, and flair.  They maintain a  sustained engagement  with both text and task.
• Sustains a perceptive, convincing and relevant personal response
• Shows a clear critical understanding of the text.
• Responds sensitively and in detail to the way the writer achieves her/his effects (sustaining a convincing voice in an empathic task).
• Integrates much well-selected reference to the text

‘Make’ > understand and discuss dramatic devices

‘Particularly’ > evaluation word

Thesis: ‘what we think/feel/realize’

Shakespeare makes this scene particularly terrifying through the implicit meanings in the text. He uses varying vocabulary and language features such as allegory and allusion, which are seen throughout the text, to create a frightening atmosphere. This mainly revolves around Macbeth, a dynamic character, whose insight to murder has changed. We realize that Macbeth is unable to cope with his past actions due to his current actions.

QUOTES/IDEAS:

“ Didst thou not hear a noise ?” — Macbeth builds tension/suspense, a small amount of fear, later layers up into terror.

“ The owl scream ” — Lady Macbeth, possible link to Duncan’s death, possible horror sound, ‘scream’ > personification.

“ As I descended ?” — Macbeth, descent downstairs, but also perhaps signifies hell/degeneration into evil + madness.

Disjoined / lack of connection between characters — Macbeth is jumpy. They disagree. Macbeth is empathetic towards Donalbain > ‘ sorry sight’, Lady Macbeth is cold and says he is ‘foolish’.

“ There’s one did laugh in’s sleep, and one cried ‘Murder !’,” > terrifying, because two random people woke up during Macbeth murdering Duncan, they have a premonition or some sort of awareness.

“ I had most need of blessing, and ‘Amen’/ Stuck in my throat. ” > he’s under the influence of evil, so God has abandoned him, he’s past the point of redemption, perhaps the turning point where he realizes he can’t go back, psychological?

“ It will make us mad ” > Lady Macbeth feels that the two of them will be mad if they dwell on their deeds in a negative way.

“ Macbeth does murder sleep ” > this is particularly terrifying as sleep also means rest and peace. Not only is Macbeth murdering sleep, but he is murdering rest and peace which he will not get as he will be haunted by the murder. ( personification )

“ Smear / The sleepy grooms with blood ” > the fact that they can pass the blame so easily and effectively is terrifying, what else can they pass the blame for if they can pass the blame for the murder.

“ Painted devil ” > the image of a dead body is likened to a painted devil seen by a child. They are just images that are feared.

“ Clean from my hand? No ” > No amount of water will be able to wash the blood off of Macbeth’s hands. He will never be able to forget about the blood on his hands, in a metaphorical sense.

“ Making the green one red ” > His hands will turn the sea red. That is the amount of blood which he bears.

Foreshadowing Lady Macbeth’s ‘out damned spot’:

“Out, damned spot! Out, I say! — One, two. Why, then, ’tis time to do ’t. Hell is murky! — Fie, my lord, fie! A soldier, and afeard? What need we fear who knows it, when none can call our power to account? — Yet who would have thought the old man to have had so much blood in him?” >  5.1, just before she commits suicide, a descent into madness — she sees spots of blood on her hands, paralleling Macebeth’s visions of blood.

Motif – recurring element of a story (lack of sleep/blood on hands).

ESSAY PLAN 3:

In what ways does Shakespeare make the relationship between Macbeth and Banquo so compelling?

P1 — Intro — Shakespeare makes the relationship between Macbeth and Banquo so compelling through the exploration of the themes of deception, death, and good versus evil. The discussion of such themes leads us, as the reader, to come to the conclusion that Macbeth is a sinister character who has somehow managed to befriend an honest, decent man, Banquo which leads to a relationship filled with tension.

P2- Deception- “I fear thou have played most foully for it” “fruitless crown” “I wish your horses swift and sure of foot”

P3 — death- “Banquo, thy soul’s flight…find heaven”  Enter the Ghost of Banquo and sits in Macbeth’s place  (stage directions)

P4 — good versus evil- juxtaposing of characters

Conclusion — strongest points again

ESSAY PLAN 4:

‘Macbeth is not an evil man, but one led astray by those around him’.

To what extent do you agree with this view?

You should write 500–600 words.

Thesis — I believe that Macbeth is an evil man and is responsible for his own actions. His sheer greed for power is what has led him astray and it was his choice to kill Duncan and have Banquo and Fleance as well as Macduff’s family killed. He has shown throughout the play that his greed, not those around him, has led him astray.

Paragraph 1: — Intro- include thesis and quick overview Paragraph 2: — Disagree paragraph Paragraph 3: — Disagree paragraph Paragraph 4: — Agree paragraph (counter) Paragraph 5: — Conclusion (quick overview of strongest points, thesis)

Point -main point

Evidence -quotation

Analysis -why/how does it relate to argument

Context -context to shakespearean times

Alternative interpretation -alternative view

Link -back to thesis

• Told by the witches that he will be king.
• Pressured by Lady Macbeth to kill Duncan.
• Witches tell him that Banquo’s descendants shall be king, incites Macbeth. Witches may have known that this would have riled Macbeth up.
• Witches told Macbeth he will be king so he could have waited until he became King the right way.
• Macbeth could have stood up to Lady Macbeth and told her no.
• Macbeth felt the need to have Banquo and Fleance killed, nobody pressured him to do so.
• Macbeth had Macduff’s family killed for no good reason.
• Macbeth acted on his own accord.

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